Saturday 12 October 2013

Bus note 75

Pink polka dots
on soft blue cotton top.
        About twenty and
        thin as anything.
Broke pieces of laugh
and snatched glances.
        From Moseley
        to St George's
where her mother
cups her elbows
        in grey hands
        pressing her
outside into warm air.
        Density.

6 comments:

  1. Appreciate the memory of the ancient see-sawing Englysshe "broken back" or balancing line, in this:

    Pink polka dots
    on soft blue cotton top.
    About twenty and
    thin as anything.
    Broke pieces of laugh
    and snatched glances...

    The stops and pauses, very finely handled there.

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  2. I'm partial to polka dots. And pink.

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  3. Close to forever lost in Harry Potter Haters.

    Thank you, both, for stopping by.

    Tom, glad you appreciate this. The breaks came a little later this time. Shifted about on the screen. Almost didn't run with the enjambments in the third and fifth lines.

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  4. Torn between cranial extension and cranial reduction....

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  5. Cranial reduction is a process long since underway here. Every day, in every way...

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